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Melancholy

How a single touch

Can reap souls

As the Melody

Begins to subside

Watching Mind & Body divide

The agony, accustomed to my eyes

Wishing to become happy again

As I turned into an empty shell

Treating the living dead

Is a waste of medicine
Sadness... It can kill
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rememberxixlovexyou Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
It sounds like it would be in a metal song. Each note is shredded and growled to loudly that it doesn't have to rhyme and you don't even really understand, but you just... feel it.
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AlfredoLover Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks I guess. XD
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rememberxixlovexyou Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Pleasure.
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SomnambulantRiparian Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Sadness can't just kill, my darling.
It can also create.

Very beautiful, by the by.
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AlfredoLover Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
So very true. and thank you. I appreciate it :)
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Melonie546 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I LIKE IT! :)
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AlfredoLover Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks XD.
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Melonie546 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
urrrr welcome XD
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AlfredoLover Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
You never really comment on my work. lol,or not that often though >.>
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Pereyga Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
i think it's well written =D
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ShaneWhitneyMyers Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2011  Student Writer
you must have some rough time to write like this..or you at least feel pity for someone..you're good, very good that is :)
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AlfredoLover Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. It would seem like that, but nothing really happened. I wrote this in like half an hour. I enjoy experimenting when i write poetry. XD
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ShaneWhitneyMyers Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2011  Student Writer
yeah, I also write some good stuff in a really short time lol :D you're welcome :)
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Fallen-Angel-Thorn Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2011   Writer
Awww... its so sad yet its so beautiful in a dark kinda way.:love:
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AlfredoLover Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you, I was always a fan of gothic literature. But I'm not so sure im good at writing it though XD
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Fallen-Angel-Thorn Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2011   Writer
Trust me when I say you have a knack for it. It was really moving.:heart:
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AlfredoLover Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I'll take your word for it. I appreciate the compliment. Thank you.
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Fallen-Angel-Thorn Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2011   Writer
no problem:happybounce:
LOL! I just remembered I've had about four to five cups of soda and I'm hyper!!
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AlfredoLover Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
lol, you remind me of one of my friends. But then again. She only gets hyper off just one can XD
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Fallen-Angel-Thorn Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2011   Writer
Lol well keep up the good work and if you get a chance please look at my work.
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AlfredoLover Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I would love to, and will be doing just that in a few minutes
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cao886 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2011
i wud say i like it but...idk what melancholy means :/
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AlfredoLover Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Get a dictionary lol. Words to a poet is like, A rifle to a soldier. You'll get killed without it. Not like you will die though, I just have strange metaphors. XD
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xglide Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2011  Student Writer
"Noun: A deep, pensive, and long-lasting sadness.
Adjective: Sad, gloomy, or depressed."
in other words it's kind of the opposite of happy
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cao886 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2011
ooh ok i get it thank you :D
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xglide Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2011  Student Writer
:meow:
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